Sweet!
That's the first time I've actually laughed out loud to a submission in quite a long time! Excellent! My only criticism is that your tip about coconut trees should say, "don't lie under coconut trees," not "don't lay under coconut trees.
Sweet!
That's the first time I've actually laughed out loud to a submission in quite a long time! Excellent! My only criticism is that your tip about coconut trees should say, "don't lie under coconut trees," not "don't lay under coconut trees.
I'm sorry
You really need to shorten that backstory. Besides, it was really, really hard to read the text (it was pretty blurry). Maybe incorporate some of that writing into animation instead?
Wicked
Excellent animation quality! But it would have been much better to see some originality. I look forward to seeing more of your work!
Funny, but couple of things
First of all, know that I found this very entertaining. However, you need to work on your sound; you may want to invest in a better microphone. Second, your timing on gags is a little off. I often found myself getting impatient for the punchlines (for example, Pac-Man chased Link for quite a while before he got slashed).
Yeah the Pac-Man bit went on too long and I never bothered editting another scene in. And as for the microphone, I'm getting the one that my friend has, where he screamed into the mic with no static (he played the fat 80's cop)
Thanks for the tips!
Funny!
That was great. You should really work on the sound, though. At one point, I actually heard your mouse clicking to turn off the recorder.
Okay, a few things
First of all, I agree with you that it's perfectly alright to have something in a similar format as another work. However, this submission isn't just similar, it's exactly the same. Think about it: a fighter checking emails and messing with the writer's name. Also, the animation of the typing needs some major work, and straight lines would be nice for the computer.
You could potentially have a good series here if the format were given some originality. Like maybe he has IM conversations or something. I also like the "visual aid" component, and I think that would be a good thing to incorporate into a series.
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I don't get it...why is he scared of the fly?
Well..;
Like I've said before, you'de be really good at making e-cards, as you have a similar style to those I've seen before. But it would be a lot better if your gags were more thought out.
Awesome
Hooray! Finally, the next episode! That was hilarious. You should seriously work on the sound quality, though. There was a lot of...echo, or backround noise, or something.
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